my little sea friend

My little sea friend  
  • One day a girl named Milly with beautiful ginger hair walked over to her favourite place on the beach where the sand sparkles like the sun's daughter the shells bright pink and the water glistened underneath the suns the reflection. Milly was waiting for her little sea friend the adventurist and most extraordinary seal her cute little seal could fool anyone except her mum And then She heard a faded sound coming from Home And here she is ever since her dad died a few years ago by a shark then she has told me a million times not to go close to the water but I never listen.


She stomped over to her as she came her seal Sparky jumped in the water like she was the giant of some sort. She grabbed her by the arm and yelled ,” what have I told you about coming to the beach alone and going close to the shore.” Milly sighs and says,”not to,” as she dragged me into the house I spot Sparky waving goodbye with his cute little paws she waved back as the door shut behind her. She gets shoved in her room with a dent in the floor just like the last 83 times and yes she has been counting. She heard the door slam from the other room as you can probably tell she is as mad as a lion who got his dinner taken of him and so is she so she jumps out of the window and head over to see sparky but that is gonna change.  


She froze as she saw the most terrifying most biggest shark she have ever seen over in the shore attacking a fishing boat at that second she saw sparky racing over to her and jumping into her arms. her mum was wondering what all the screaming was about and came out as soon as she saw the shark she Fainted and she was standing there wishing she never came out here but everything has to come to an end so the shark left no one people died but a few injured and now i never go to the shore but sparky comes to me so everything is all good.

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  1. Anonymous27 August 2017 at 14:36

    Hello Em
    I really enjoyed the story, I liked how you used good descriptive language when you described how angry she was. Next time make sure you use the same font all the way threw your story and read over your writing because there are a few words that shouldn't be where they are, for example "no ONE people died but a few injured."

    Yours Sincerely Emma
    Year 8
    Oamaru Intermediate School

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